A poem I wrote for ELA

[RYANMILLER36]

Yeah. I wrote this. I told you that I would share something of my writing. I had to write this. Whipped it up in about 15 mins

CHANGE

Long ago, there used to be many strict policies
Now, hardly a hint of modesty
Some days you feel like you’re on top of the world
But that can change with just a few cruel words

Walking through malls like you own the place
Scoffing at every different face
Before there were forests and green a plenty
Now Starbucks and other corporate places filled with many

The people with much spare change
Unwilling to share within any range
You can hear the greed on the street
Watch in horror as someone is gunned down because of goals they just can’t meet
The world is a hateful place, along with the inhabitants in it

People are like ticking time bombs
Never quite sure If or when they’ll go off
Change has come to the world
But not at all for the better

Change will continue to come
We just have to learn how to cope
Until we can find a way to coax ourselves out

[RYANMILLER36]

isn't anyone going to read my poem???

[twistedblister]

ok. its early and my cognitive critical skills are not cranking out juice.

i will coment on this later. i have some questions. not sure aobout What the subject ELA is.

pretty dark tone.

[fishki]

i read it yesterday , just didnt comment

[RYANMILLER36]

ok. its early and my cognitive critical skills are not cranking out juice.

i will coment on this later. i have some questions. not sure aobout What the subject ELA is.

pretty dark tone.

English Language Arts

[RYANMILLER36]

i read it yesterday , just didnt comment

What'd you think?

[twistedblister]

ha. you will laugh. when i read ELA i was wondering if you were writing a poem about the EULA ( End users license agreement) ha. nerd poetry woot.

i need more time to be more constructive in my criticisam. it has good pecies and some that need work but not awful for cobbling it together in 15 mins.

kind of beat tonignht late dinner and i have to do some practice maybe some typing of my own.